Translation Check by Chrouya
Script: PapaKiki 09 [edited][new timing].ass
Workraw: PapaKiki 09.avi
* Asterisks implying comments*

20
He'd promised to get up early, too.
*In this case, the 'd is most likely an abbreviation of had, causing "promise" to be written in past participle*

21
And he's already tired from working.
*Following up Miu's sentence*

36
It's like a short trip.
*chottoshita is an adjective for something minor*

54
Didn't you hate eggplants?
*I thought putting eggplants in plural was more natural, not sure though. Also, past tense.*

55
Did you know that eggplants cost 198 yen per bag?

72
She was always dressed perfectly, too.
*Show the past tense.*

95
*I'm not against that translation. I would change it to something like*
I'd be glad if you would.

104
*He probably says Miuyu, but I like the word "Miyuyu" more so why not!*

118
Kiss. It's a mambo fish!
*or "mambo". It's a species, after all.*
*perhaps put kiss between asterisks, ie. sound effect*

130
It's a discount coupon.
*welp. It's what she says.*

151
and can't keep her eyes off of you girls.
*I'm aware that "guys" is a common word of grouping, but when he defines it with "sanshimai=3 sisters", I would not go for "guys"*

263
I'll be on my way home, guys!
*I'll be going home, guys!" could be an alternative translation*

274
Cinderella doesn't want anyone seeing her while the magic is fading away.
*using the "fade away" option here, because it's an active action*

304
Please watch it.
*Obviously, even if I'm being ordered to watch it, I'll do it with pleasure...*